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My You Are Poem

You are a train track which chatters all day long like mums at the hairdressers.

You are sneaky slithery snake which runs all day long like a cheeky cheater.

You are a stunning sun which moves all the time like a slow motion movie.

You are a jumping kangaroo that hops as high as a plane.

 

11 Responses to “My You Are Poem”

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    Ellie sww September 30, 2020 at 9:40 am

    I really love it

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    Elana September 30, 2020 at 9:40 am

    I loved the part where you write you are a stunning sun which move’s all the time in a slow motion movie.

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    Ava Jay September 30, 2020 at 9:47 am

    I love the sentence “You are a jumping kangaroo that hops as high as a plane” Well done!

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    Tulisa SWW October 1, 2020 at 10:26 am

    I really like the way you said a kangaroo jumping high as a plane.

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    Stc October 1, 2020 at 10:27 am

    I Love how you described the sun and snake
    Well done

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    Tulisa SWW October 1, 2020 at 10:30 am

    I like the way you said stunning sun which moves all the time like a slow-mo movie

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    Ava SWW October 1, 2020 at 10:32 am

    Hello,
    1.Well done i really love this poem. I love the sentence “You are the train track which chatters all day long like your mums at the hair dressers.
    2.Do you do poetry often.
    3. Next time maybe remember comas after ” Sneaky, slithery snake.”

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    Lena October 1, 2020 at 10:33 am

    1. Great similes
    2. Is your mum a chatterbox?
    3. Can you add in some more commas.
    Great work well done!

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    Anonymous October 1, 2020 at 10:34 am

    Why is there a snake?

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    Bobby SWW October 1, 2020 at 10:36 am

    I like the sentence you are a train track which chatters.
    Did you enjoy writing the poem?
    Would the last sentence be improved if you named the plane?

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    Tulisa SWW October 1, 2020 at 10:42 am

    The first sentence is amazing.
    How tall is the kangaroo?
    Next time start with a different starter.

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