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You are a very talented colourful farting fish swishing through the dirty blue ocean with a fluffy tail that has a yellow bow on it.
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Next time don’t use the word ‘farting’ but lovely poem.
1. I love the description of the fish.
2. Could you make this a bit longer?
3. Maybe use a better adverb for farting.
I LOVE ITS SO AWESOME
Why is it awesome Mariam?
1. I love your poem about the fluffy tail with the bow on it!
2.What talents does the fish have?
3.I think you could make it a little bit longer and describe the bow and the ocean a little bit more.
1) I really like the alliteration E.G: Farting fish.
2)Can you give another adjective for colourful?
3)Maybe you can add a few more sentences.
Because it’s a funny poem