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The winter heart

You are like the winter night sky.

you are like the starry blackness.

you are like the snow beneath our boots
crunching.

You are a lovely Winter heart.

you are like the snow men saying hi

You are like the presents lying one Christmas Eve

you are like the swirly,blizzard of lovely Winter hearts

you are a jingle bells on a Reindeer antlers

you are  an artic wolf ready to pounce

you are a Christmas pudding getting eaten by little cheeky elfs

 

 

9 Responses to “The winter heart”

  1. that was very good

  2. that was very enjoyable to read

  3. dear sacred heart,

    Hi sacred here, our names are Charlotte and Jenna…we saw your poem and it was amazing. we liked how you used different synonyms in your poem. We also i liked how you made it Christmas… it really made us feel like it was Christmas. This was amazing, keep up the good work.

    Sincerely, Jenna and Charlotte

  4. 1. We really enjoyed the winter theme and the variety of objects described.
    2. Why did you decide to go for a winter theme?
    3. To improve it, you could correct the missing capital letters.

  5. Grate work

  6. I really enjoyed the bit where you said You are a Winter Heart.
    What do you mean by You are a winter night sky?
    I do think though you should keep an eye on your grammar.

  7. Millie and Tess October 1, 2020 at 10:30 am

    We really enjoy the line you are an arctic wolf ready to pounce.
    Could you maybe think of a synonym for winter?
    You could use more capital letters and full stops.

  8. Gabby and Elsie October 2, 2020 at 10:18 am

    That was amazing something you could improve on is you capital letters and full stop and i would have liked to see a little more description about Christmas eve.

  9. Alasdair and Darcy October 2, 2020 at 10:20 am

    i like all of it and we especially like the name and the idea

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