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You are,

You are a tree,

swaying in the wild,wonderful wind ,

like a balloon.

 

You are a playground,

with millions of kids playing on you,

like a magnet.

 

You are a wonderful, colourful maple leaf,

slowly floating down,

down to the ever flowing, never ending river .

 

You are the taste of Monday morning ,

the feeling of school ,

when I wake up .

 

You are the smell of the wild woods ,

on a beautiful summers evening ,

fresh air everywhere .

 

You are the sound of birds tweeting ,

at 5am in the morning ,

and crickets chirping loudly.

 

6 Responses to “You are,”

  1. Josie.
    you can make it better a bit more better.
    how long did it take
    you can change the words

  2. 1. I like the part about birds
    2.Can you describe more?
    3.I think you can improve your punctuation.

  3. Wow! You are obviously very experienced with poetry, and i can assume that this took a long time to make for all of the detail!

  4. this is an amazing poem, how did you get the ideas, they are a bit random you could maybe link all of the pieces of writing

  5. It is a good poem you r a good poet.
    i like the part when you said when i wake up it seems like you will never wake up.
    maybe make the paragraphs longer

  6. Josie.
    you can make it better a bit more better.
    how long did it take
    you can change the words

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