you are a number 8 like a unfinished snowman with no nose
you are home as cosy as a fireplace
my blood is as red as a rose
You are a toasted marshmallow in the cold night
you are impossible like an ice cube melting
You are as crispy as a autumn leaf .
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Hi.
I like you poem it’s gud
how are you
Try and add more
1. I really like your descriptive words for the snowman.
2.What were you thinking when you wrote this?
3.you need to use capital letters and full stops but apart from that everything was amazing.
1) We especially like your similes.
2) Could you improve the fireplace?
3) You could improve it by describing things further.