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You are poem

You are a Coca-Cola lollipop
As sweet as  a chocolate cake
You are more expensive than an iPad  shining like the sun. 

You are as fast as the wind
like a cold winter
 a piece of a snowflake
falling off it

You are a scrambled egg
hotter than the desert
like a flaming campfire.

You are as spooky as a ghost
wicked as a witch
making a potion on Halloween
A haunted house
on a hillside on a cold night
moonlight shining  on all the children

a vampire in it’s coffin a pumpkin with wings a werewolf gone wild
The invisible man stealing candy from children.

4 Responses to “You are poem”

  1. Hi Logan
    I really like the line “ You are a Coca-Cola lollipop as sweet as a chocolate cake.”
    What potion is the witch making?
    Maybe you could name the desert where the flaming campfire is.

  2. Charlie and Hevenle October 1, 2020 at 10:32 am

    Hi Logan brilliant work.
    1.I like the line You are a coca-cola lollipop as sweet as chocolate cake.
    2.what does it mean where it says a vampire in its coffin a pumpkin with wings a werewolf gone wild.
    3.maybe once you have finished check for capital letters and full stops but other than that it is a great piece of creativity and you have put a lot of effort into it.keep up the hard working.
    Good luck
    Hevenle and charlie

  3. Hi
    1.i really like the line as spooky as a ghost as wicked as a witch making a potion on Halloween a haunted house on a hill side on a cold night moon shining on all the children.
    2.why was this line on Halloween. What made you choose this?
    3.Could you add more Detail to the desert .like about how hot the floor is…..

  4. Hi Logan
    1. I really like the line you are a Coca Cola lollipop you are amazing keep up with the hard work.2.where did you get the line from? 3.How about you put this you are a Coca Cola lollipop melting in the sun.

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