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You are poem

You are a feather gracefully blowing in autumn winds

You are the sound of an African elephant stampeding through the wild plains

You are an icy lake reflecting the pure truth of life

You are like a hound on the hunt for his meal

You are the impossibility of

loud space,    quiet children,     a cold fire,

You are the smell of roses on a spring morning

You are the number O and its eye shaped glare.

3 Responses to “You are poem”

  1. Reply
    Hector October 1, 2020 at 10:24 am

    Hello Lilly

    I am Hector

    Great piece of work just to let you know you don’t have to improve anything because it is well thought through keep up the good work and keep writing.

  2. Reply
    Andrei October 1, 2020 at 10:41 am

    I like the part about the 0, very creative.What was your source of inspiration for this poem?I think it’s so good it can’t be improved!

  3. Reply
    Zoe October 15, 2020 at 10:38 am

    Hi Lilly.
    Great poem.
    I like the line “you are a feather gracefully blowing in autumn winds”.
    On the line “the smell of roses on a spring morning” what colour is the rose?
    You colour say on the line “you are an icy lake reflecting the pure truth of life” you could say where the lake is.

    Over all a very good poem.

    Jax and Zoe.

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