The animal poem
You are a slithering, snake laid on the sizzling Sahara.
You are a pretty, pink pig pooping in its purple pen.
You are a flying sheep flipping in the freezing cold air.
You are a daring dog dancing on a donkey.
You are a dumb donkey dancing on a digestive biscuit.
You are a chicken clucking at a carpenter’s cap.
Good alliteration, maybe add in some more verses
Why a pretty pink pig pooping? could you think of anything else to replace that ? Over all though i think its really good:)