You Are
You are a Sunday morning opening it’s eyes and grinning.
You are as shiny as clean apple.
You are as Cold as a freeze open as I walk passed it on a hot sunny day.
You look as prickly as a sharp green cactus.

You are a Sunday morning opening it’s eyes and grinning.
You are as shiny as clean apple.
You are as Cold as a freeze open as I walk passed it on a hot sunny day.
You look as prickly as a sharp green cactus.

1. Some great juxtaposition for Sunday morning
2. What is the second line about?
3.A couple more lines?
Could you try and add alliteration?
I like how you added lots of adjectives.
Could you make it a bit longer.
Excellent descriptive sentences
Who is smiling on the first line?
Maybe a couple more lines and some rhyming