3 Responses to “The abandoned bicycle”

  1. 1. I like how you see colour to show that it was rusty.
    2. How did the bike get out of the pond?
    3. You could use a different personification phrase.

  2. 1.I like how you said it changed to yellow and orange.
    2.Why didn’t you do it as long?
    3.You could have used a simile or personification.

  3. 1. I like the bit were the bike turned yellow and orange from the wind and rain.
    2.Where did you get the ideas from?
    3.It is great! maybe you can add a bit more.

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