4 Responses to “autumn”

  1. This is really good

  2. Lexi-May shcp chorley October 15, 2020 at 10:25 am

    Hi it’s lovely to see your post you did very well! I love it!!

  3. Maggie SH
    1.I love were you put the part at the beginning about the golden chestnuts being grilled
    2.What is your favourite season ?and why ?
    3.Where you put the chestnuts being grilled it does not really make sense when their being grilled on a fire in a foggy wood.

  4. 1. I really like how you used ‘ the naked trees shiver ‘
    2. Have you ever stepped on a crunchy leaf in autumn and heard it crunch
    3. A good improvement is that when you put ‘ gold chestnuts being grilled in an blazing open fire’ you put an instead of a ! Good work though 👍 🌟

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