autumn
Gold chestnuts being grilled
in an blazing open fire
in the foggy woods.
Orange leaves falling
Of the autumn trees
slowly drop one by one.
The naked trees shiver
in the frozen autumn
weather.
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This is really good
Hi it’s lovely to see your post you did very well! I love it!!
Maggie SH
1.I love were you put the part at the beginning about the golden chestnuts being grilled
2.What is your favourite season ?and why ?
3.Where you put the chestnuts being grilled it does not really make sense when their being grilled on a fire in a foggy wood.
1. I really like how you used ‘ the naked trees shiver ‘
2. Have you ever stepped on a crunchy leaf in autumn and heard it crunch
3. A good improvement is that when you put ‘ gold chestnuts being grilled in an blazing open fire’ you put an instead of a ! Good work though 👍 🌟