The happy snow
In the sky, the silky smooth snow scattered across the sky, the snow sleeping after landing on the soft ground. Kids ran on the snow and threw the snow (which made the snow happy) and after hours the kids got called in for dinner.
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1.I like the part were you put the silky smooth snow scatterd across the sky.
2.Maybe add more suspence next time.
3.You did really well.
Good, but remove “in the sky” at the start.
1.Well done for “silky smooth snow”.
2.Good use of personification.
3.Maybe remove “in the sky” at the start.