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Contrasting characters by Mark

While the majority of the class were listening to instructions,Daniel slowly and silently clipped to his chair at the back of the classroom, “Sorry I’m late I would have been here earlier but we got caught up in time.as he sat on his chair already focused. To interested in the current task he continued. He was just to exited to get on with the day

Without a doubt Carlos rushed into the class disrupting everyone “Morning Mr J sorry I’m late, I was too slow to catch the bus while keeping quiet after yesterday during tennis at the park.”He sat down. Without a word,he got on with the morning task. Ready to take on the upcoming day he listened and got on.

Now everyone watched on as they were all in class doing there reading lesson Carlos and Daniel spoke to each other,” We’re the only ones late.” As they got on with there reading,they started to read. Got on to enjoy their new books from yesterday.

3 Responses to “Contrasting characters by Mark”

  1. Hi Mark, it’s Sophie from the Emporium.
    Well done with your work. It builds a really good image in my head.
    1. I really like the line, Without a doubt Carlos rushed into the class disrupting everyone “Morning Mr J sorry I’m late, I was too slow to catch the bus while keeping quiet after yesterday during tennis at the park.”
    2. Why was he to slow to catch the bus?
    3. Maybe you could have a mix of short and longer sentences.
    Well done and keep up with the great ideas and good work.
    Yours sincerely Sophie.
    Great work and keep on posting. Well done!

  2. Hi Mark
    It’s Ella and Isla from MrGs emporium.
    1. I really like the line “ Without aMorning Mr J sorry I’m late, I was too slow to catch the bus while keeping quiet after yesterday during tennis at the park. doubt Carlos rushed into the class disrupting everyone “Morning Mr J sorry I’m late, I was too slow to catch the bus while keeping quiet after yesterday during tennis at the park.”
    2. What was the morning task?
    3. Maybe you could say the task in the line “ He sat down. Without a word,he got on with the morning task.”
    It’s a amazing piece of writing, keep up the good work!!!

  3. Hi Mark
    It’s Jack and Sandra from MrGs Emporium
    1.I really like the idea Daniel slowly and silently because you used two words that start with s which makes it sound good.
    2.Where did you get the idea from?
    3. Remember to put full stops at the end of your sentences.

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