The Phantom Figure by Callum@Belmont
Although Tom has the feeling of dread in his stomach, he entered the master bedroom. Perched on the end of the bed was a phantom-like figure and he had never seen anything like it before. The figure, who seemed to be clutching a rose, starred at an empty corner. A tear dropped onto her threadbare dress. Her mouth trembled, as sounds that Tom couldn’t understand came out of her mouth. Her hands shook, as Tom moved closer.
Wow, this is great! Could you spell-check stared? For an improvement, you could possibly change has to had, and that would put in all the same tense.
1 good punctuation full stops and comas
2 maybe you could write a bit more
3 good blog