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Character scene

It was a hot summer day, James was playing football in his yard with some of the new neighbours that just moved in. As he kicked the ball he noticed one of the new neighbours was sat alone reading Peter and the Star catchers. He had pale skin and mocha coloured short hair. As he looked over one of the boy’s brothers said,
” Don’t deal with that dork! He’s not worth the time!” So James went back to football and got hit in the face with the ball.

While Theo was reading his book, sat on the curb, his brothers were playing football with one of their neighbours. The boy had tanned skin(probably from playing football) and fiery orange hair.When Theo saw the neighbour looking over he buried himself in his book, the last thing he wanted to do was talk to him.

When Theo’s brothers went to play at the park James decided to say hi to Theo.
“Hi what’s your name?” James asked. 

“M-my n-name is Th-Th-Theo.”As James and Theo got to know each other Theo’s brothers returned,

“I didn’t know i hit a dork with a football!” Said one of Theo’s brothers laughing.Theo looked embarrassed but James was really annoyed and yelled

“WHAT IS WRONG WITH YOU!” The brothers ran off and planned something big to scare James…

One Response to “Character scene”

  1. Hi Lily, it’s Sophie from the Emporium.
    Well done, it has a really good description and it builds a really good picture in my head.
    1. I really like the line “ While Theo was reading his book, sat on the curb, his brothers were playing football with one of their neighbours.”
    2. Who was the person that he was playing football with? Like who was his/her name.
    3. Maybe you could say what park it was. (Name it.)
    Apart from that well done and it’s a great piece of work.
    Keep up with the good ideas and great vocabulary.

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