Charlie sww bad and good people

The clock struck five minuets past nine Mr. Lamp started to teach like he dose about water William’s creep in to his seat , grabbed his notebook and whispered ”sorry Mr. Lamp .” Mr. Lamp replied ” that’s ok can you go and wash your hands ,” ”yes I can” replied William. All of a sudden Draven jump in to class Saying ” hello Mr. L”. Mr. lamp said ” just sit down”. ”When” said Draven ” now and go and wash your hands ” Mr. Lamp said with rage. ”ok but you just said sit down. moaned Daven. Mr. L replied ” just go and was your hands” ” Where” said Draven ” in the priceable office” said Mr. Lamp ” But ” said Draven ” no but’ s” yelled Mr. lamp.

One Response to “Charlie sww bad and good people”

  1. Great effort here Charlie! You lost the format when pasting in, remember we said you have to check your format ie paragraphs and sentences etc. We have a few spelling mistakes you could pick out if you read back over. I like that the clock struck 5 minutes past nine – this leads us to know the pupil is late without saying it. Creative! Well done. I’d suggest being careful using too much speech in creative writing as it can become a dialogue and we want creative suspense. Keep going Charlie! I can’t wait to see the next bit of writing that you do!

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