Shadows
I opened the rotten wooden door. Should I go in? Inside the room there where pots and jars filled with cloudy liquid, boxes where strewn across the dusty floor. In front of me, there was a dangling spider, eight eyes all staring at me, it’s legs moving in a hypnotic motion. A beam of light shone over me, in a flash it went, and thunder crackled above me. A figure stepped out of the dark shadows.
1.I like how you described the liquid.
2.I like how you asked me a question “Should I go in?”
3.You could improve on next time giving the spider a name or a type of spider like a tarantula?