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The room of magic

I stood in the room of clocks,

 trying to see what the time is.

 

I stood in the room of planes, 

as I fly up.

 

I stood in the room of storm

as I got soaked.

 

I stood in the room of cars, 

whizzing past my face.

 

I stood in the room of suns,

The toast burned.

 

I stood in the room of humans,

I couldn’t see so I got lost.

 

I stood in the room of paper,

As I got a paper cut 

 

I stood in the room of rusted metal,

I tried to avoid touching it.

 

I stood in the room of jumpers,

I wear it.

 

I stood in the room of wishes,

I made a wish.

 

I stood in the room of air,

I took a deep breath.

 

I stood in the room of paint,

I started colouring.

 

 

I stood in the room of light,

I could barely open my eye.

 

Finally, I wandered  in the room of  fathers,

Trying to pick me up.

6 Responses to “The room of magic”

  1. I liked I stood in the room of air, I took a deep breath.
    What was your wish?
    Could you say open my eyes instead of eye?

  2. I really liked were you ended it!
    Whats your wish?
    Maybe instead of saying I could barely open my eye instead say I could barely see?

  3. I like the room of cars and how they,re whizzing past that really makes a picture in my head about car racing well done and same with every room.

  4. Well done! This is a great poem. My favourite was: ‘I stood in the room of paper…’.
    My question is: In the room of fathers is the character’s father in there?
    To make this even better maybe you could add a little bit about whether the father was with someone else!
    Great job! I think this is really good!

  5. I like your description and your choice of words
    some sentences don’t make sense
    mayby don’t leave so many gaps inbetwene each sentences

  6. Maisie and Aurbrey@quethoick May 27, 2021 at 11:18 am

    1. i like the fact that you added the storm room and you got soaked.
    2. could add a cloud room?
    3.Mabye add some more like the room of lava.

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