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ryan Sww chapter 3

Chapter 3 *the bizarre ocean*

Sprinting down the halls, Fives barged through the guests and workers soon coming up to the door that housed the book. He slowed down when going through the door knowing that Alastair had placed a alarm system to keep out guests and fives from holding the power of the book that could break time and space as he knew it though nothing really happened to fives he just walked in nothing was in place like someone wanted him there. Fives picked up the flaming gold pen and began to write in the book finishing the contents of his chapter. Suddenly fives heard something outside not footsteps, not animal footsteps it was almost the sound of construction he knew what it was. Fives pushed open the door to see a brand new room titled * oceans bizarre worlds*

Fives entered. Weirdly he came to be in some sort of submarine filled with colours and stickers across the inside paired with reminders crackles emerged from every corner “ladies and gentlemen prepare for the ultimate ocean experience!” yelled a familiar voice. The submarine drove forward. Screeches echoed through the sub… It was a blue giant floating across the ocean depths rainbows worth of fishes passed the windows though something was wrong the submarine did not stop after an hour but he looked below to see it.

2 Responses to “ryan Sww chapter 3”

  1. Hi! Really nice work, I really enjoyed reading!
    Why did you put stars next to your title?
    Make sure to use capital letters on your title and maybe do a bit more longer sentences so its more clear! Good job!

  2. Ryan this is wonderful but i think you could put (an) instead of (a) in the sentence below

    He slowed down when going through the door knowing that Alastair had placed (a) alarm system to keep out guests and fives from holding the power of the book that could break time and space as he knew it though nothing really happened to fives he just walked in nothing was in place like someone wanted him there.

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