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tasty cotton candy by Rory

In the land of neverbelieve I found the most gorgous creature eating chocolate

In the land In the land of Neverbelieve, I found the most gorgous creature eating chocolate in its natural habitat Neverbelieve I saw a mountain looking down at the birds singing  and playing in the snow

In the land of Neverbelieve  I saw, a mountain looking down at the birds singing and playing in the snow and of Neverbelieve ,I tasted the most delicious cotton candy as the moon peered down at the stars

In the land of Neverbelieve,the sky glider through the sky as fast as a Lamborghini going at full speed

In the land of Neverbelieve,the fire breathe breathed fire as hot as lava coming from a volcano that had just erupted

In the land of Neverbelieve,I captured a cheater just as it was about to eat its prey

In the land of Neverbelieve,I sang the most beautiful song anyone could think off

In the land of Neverbelieve,I touched the most soft ,fluffy fury animal

 

 

 

2 Responses to “tasty cotton candy by Rory”

  1. I think that as hot as lava was good because it used a simile.
    Why did you chose a volcano.
    To make it even better in the first one you could of use something

  2. This is a great poem and I like the name a few spelling mistakes though but it is good

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