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  1. Phoenix class

    What have you done well? – We like the rhyming of ‘bloom’ and ‘June’ in line two.

    Question – Why did you go all the way up to the month of August?

    What could be improved next time? – Check your punctuation throughout. Check where you could add in some full stops and commas.

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