Sorry I do know what she was hiding from let’s continue. She got up after the thud and she said “Thanks for letting me hide in here” so I said
“no problem” then I said “what you hiding from anyways”
Then she replied “it it was chasing me”
I said “what’s it?”
She said “the legend of the squirrel-a-mander.”
“The the” i mumbled
“Yes I know” she spoke then I heard it really loud footsteps but I thought since it’s a squirrel-a-mander it will have tiny footsteps but I was wrong it had large ones “OH NO QUICK DOWN HERE!!” the girl shouted so I jump down and I locked the door five minutes later we heard the glass door smash, we thought we would die.
Very good but what is all the spaces? And maybe next time don’t put so much spaces
This was good but made you need it a little longer
I really like all of the speech that you put in!
What happens next?
I think you should put speech on different lines not on the same lines!
I really like your post so please do another one?!?