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The terror in their eyes.

The terror is made from-

The executioner’s gaunt smile

The drips that aren’t the pipes

Fields that have no exit

The last dark room that you’ll ever enter

And that shadowy corner where the dark figure of fear stands just waiting to make you cry.

I found the terror-

In the eye of a rusty old scarecrow where the ravens linger

Down in the depths of the ocean where no one has laid a finger

Caged in the fury of a raging bear

Ravaged on the pavement where life is rare.

This terror can-

Pierce the strongest of minds and rip them into shards

It can devour even the bravest of men and chew them up

It can crush Mt Everest until it is but a sea of gravel

It can rip the tower of Pisa off it’s foundation and brandish it as a weapon.

But if the terror was ever set free the world would be crippled and crumple like paper as ripple of fear consumed us all.

3 Responses to “The terror in their eyes.”

  1. Elizabeth SHCP Yr5 May 23, 2022 at 9:28 am

    I love that it rhymes but what are the drips that aren’t the pipes? Keep on using the strong vocabulary, it really let me see the picture inside of my head.

  2. I love what descriptive words you have used and how you have set the scene. What sea did you find it in? Maybe try to use more words to describe where it is.

  3. 1. I like how you’ve made it mysterious.
    2. How did you think of “ The Terror In The Eyes”?
    3. Maybe next time you can leave a cliffhanger to make it more scary and for the reader to read on. But other than that it was an amazing piece of writing.

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