The complaint from a mouse

Dear human as you may or may not know I am a mouse living in your house,and I would like to talk about the certain leftovers that you leave out for me.As i’m a mouse I would expect something more like cheese or caviar and not unnecessary bits of bacon or bread crust’s laying around on your plates.From my point view I see a huge lack of cheese in your fridge and home.Though as I do have a family to feed i’m trying ask if you could increase the amount of cheese in your house please.

One Response to “The complaint from a mouse”

  1. I love on how you made your mouse act.
    Do you need a comma after a conjunction?
    Could you switch out some bits and add more description

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