Mouse in my house
I am a mouse my name is moustache. I live in a house there are 5 people in the house. One day the little boy left some crisps on the floor. I ate them and they were very disgusting. Next I ate pizza the pizza was very very very disgusting. Yuck. I want some yummy cheese.
Well done! Could you add more drama to it? When it says next add a comma and don’t just go plain like I ate them and it was very disgusting go bigger and better like I picked the tiniest piece and ate it. I spat it out and in disgust stamped on it.