Are you the best dragon whisper? If you are read on. We are looking for the best dragon whisper ever to ever existed. If you think you are capable answer this question: can you speak the dragon language? Are you capable of taming a dragon? If you can do all of this things please meet us at the abandoned hospital down town at 4 o’clock. If you except the job your reward will be: 100 fire balls and £9000.
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1) I love th idea of a question at the start , it really catches the readers attention.2) Where did you get the idea for them too meet you at the abandoned hospital? 3) Maybe you could make it more descriptive to catch even more of the readers attention .
I like the way you used the advert feel.
How do you pay fireballs?
Maybe you can add some more lines to interest the reader more.