The Ship Wreckage
As Pazu eyes opened he was met with a worrying sight. He could see the eagle eye, once immense and magnificent it was now splayed on a vast field in ruins. He looked beside him and saw Sheeta unconscious next to him. He turned over and started shaking her frantically whilst shouting her name. In an instant she opened her eyes and screamed back at him “ What !!!” her face in a grimace obviously unimpressed with the sudden awakening. Her face changed almost instantly as she saw what was happening around them. “What happened” she said her voice cracking as she tried to sound brave. “I don’t know, I though you would know” he stammered making no attempt to sound brave. “ We should look around, maybe there’s some survivors other than us, they might need help.” she said standing up and puffing out her chest. “ “Really, I think they would be helping us, remember we are just kids. We are in the middle of nowhere with no food or water, we can’t do anything!” he said worry cracking his voice.
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