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I met a girl called Frost.
Her hair was snow-soft and her skin was as cold as ice cubes.She breathed and you could see frost come out her mouth.
I met a man called Fire,who had hands that would burn you.He had a very frustrated mind.Whenever he was mad fire SHOT out of his ears and nose.
I met a woman called Nature.
She had butterflies all around her,and had green emerald like eyes.Wherever she walked a bloom of flowers sprung out of her.
I met a girl called water.
She had hair which was blue with clear highlights.She even made freshwater droplets out of thin air!
from Ronnie Lancaster Road primary school 5B i think its a good comment because u have used lots of simelys and adjectives