5 Responses to “The autumn haiku”

  1. Nice Haiku! Where are the bunnies sleeping? Why are the marshmallows melting? Also,I love the way you wrote the bunnies sleep!

  2. This is a great piece of work well done . Great punctuation very well done . Well done on keeping 5 7 5.

  3. This is a very good poem but just remember to put your comers after.

  4. Instead of full stops make them commas.

  5. I like the fact that you tried to stick to the 5,7,5 rule.
    What place are the children playing in?
    Maybe be more specific e.g the auburn leaves.

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