Betty and the burger
Betty got on the bus and found…
A flying BURGER!
The burger chased Betty rapidly!
When Betty thought she was safe…
The Burger came back !
DUN DUN DAAAAAA!
The Burger shrank and…
Betty ate the Burger!
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1.I like the bit where you use dun dun daaa because its making the reading think what happens next.
2. Where did you get the idea of a flying burger?
3.You could put more punctuation in and more adjective.