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The Dead Forest by Alicia

He looked over his shoulder, it was coming through the burning flames towards him.  Tom’s heart felt like a drum beating hard and fast. He stumbled, he landed face first in the wet mud. Deep footprints were in the track in front of him and tall dark trees surrounded him on all sides. He was trapped.

One Response to “The Dead Forest by Alicia”

  1. Hi Alicia
    It’s Casey and Reu
    1. We like” Toms heart felt like drum beating hard and fast”.
    2. Why have you used the heart in your writing?
    3. Maybe you could improve this part”he landed face first in the wet mud.”what is he doing in the mud? And why is he outside?
    Keep up the good work!
    From Reu and Casey.

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