The skyscraper
The skyscraper loomed over the dead deserted city. Above the sky scraper, sad snow slowly smothered Sydney’s floors . Peering over the clouds astonishing asteroids freely flew over curious clouds.
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I really like the alliteration and the use of smothered in this piece of writing. Maybe you could have less description and a little more personification and similes. Also maybe put a bit more exitement in.