My Nightmare Niamh+Archie
“What was that?” shouted Keira as the thunder shot across the midnight sky like a bullet. She couldn’t get her head out of the covers. What was it? A dream, a nightmare, or was it real? Thunder and lightning smashing the window. I heard a creak coming up stairs, a glass shattering and people shouting. My heart rate climbed higher and higher. I was sweating and I couldn’t hear my self think even though the only thing to think about was what would happen next.
1)I loved how you describe how the character felt.
2)How did you come up with the idea of it?
3)Maybe try to add some more speech.