Widows Web by Eliyana @Belmont
Jasmine edged towards the enclosed entrance tentatively. She mocked herself for being such a baby. Her thin cloak wiped her eyes, she kicked open the door. On the ceiling, a black widow spun it’s withered web. To one side, a table lay strewn with a golden horn, blood-stained cutlery and a crown of Ruby’s, emeralds, diamonds and sapphires. On the mantle piece, a mask sat. It looked too heavy to be worn and wherever you’d go it’s eyes would always follow you. On the floor, scratches lay everywhere. The door slammed shut. The only passageway out of the heart of the petrified forest.
wow! Ilove this idea and how you have used clever synonyms and grammar to make this story amazin.
Super beginning , I can really tell so much about the character, bringing her alive. I wasn’t quite sure what you meant by her cloak wiped her eyes – is this what you meant? Perhaps a bit more detail here might have made it clear to me. I really enjoyed this – thanks!
Hi I am Aiza from Chorley St James
1. I love it how you described the part emerald, sapphire and diamonds.
2. How did she get in there?
3. Make a part 2 !