Black Figure
One night a boy called Ben heard a creak from his door in his bedroom. He then slightly opened his eyes and saw a black figure, he closed his eyes then opened them wide and it was gone……………………..
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Hi Lola and Daria, good writing. I think you could improve the suspense in your piece by getting your character to ask some questions and describing his feelings, For example, “What was that noise? Ben thought to himself, a sense of panic beginning to well up inside him.”