Sun dragon by Mustafa Hussain TJS
Far away from Earth, the sun dragon rests laying on the sun itself. His scales glow in the morning and darken in the night. If it came down to Earth it would explode the whole Earth. It’s razor-sharp claws would burn a mortal’s skin, melting them to the ground. It’s unforgettable eyes would send rays out and send you down to the bottom of the Earth’s core. His golden tail shines in the night brightening the people down below. Many people were shocked to see a star so bright but when it came closer and closer until it burned their eyes. Blood dripping from his deadly fangs,mortal’s guts spit out. Golden skin melt the night sky. Soaring through the sky, he is able to reach 100mph. Unable to speak, his ear bursting roar echos within your ears, with no end.
I love this piece of work. You did amazing in this! Keep up the good work!
1. I like how you used Far away from earth and his scales glow
2. Maybe you could improve your sentence openers
3. I love his razor-sharp claws