Eli SWW
WANT TO TRY AND TAME DRAGON’S?
Now is your chance to tame dragons. Come on over and get all you want from supplies and gold all you have to do is come and capture all of the dragons in the woods and you will be safe forever and nothing will get you if you captuer five then you will get a tesla model x.
We expect you to have all of the protecting equipment and all of the stuff to trap them so they are in your grasp. If you don’t then we will provide you with it. The dome that will go around them is one hundred meters by one hundred meters if they have there safety hunis on when they are in the dome then they will go wild.
We want you to…
feed them,
keep them in side unless they have a safety hunis on them.
and be kind.
WANING’S
If you let them out of there cage then they will kill all of the people in the toun.
PS have fun.
I really like this maybe remove the apostrphie for dragons because its not belonging to anyone however it’s still a very good write!
Good job on the ellipsis!
Could you add bullet points in the list?
Maybe get rid of the x on the first paragraph?
1) I really like the description
2) How did you come up with it
3) Why did you leave a big space at the end of your 2 paragraph
GREAT JOB! Really well done! I love the bit where it says ‘so they are in your grasp’.
Did you check the spelling of capture?
I suggest for you to check your spellings!
Good job though!