The airship crashes!
As Harry looked up, he saw the beautiful clouds sweeping past the sky hawk. Captain Cecil was navigating the airship to their destination, sky island but at that moment, something blacker than black swooped up in front of the weather beaten airship. Harry flew back at the force of the wings just then, the creature tore a chunk out of the balloon and the old airship came to a halt and started to swoop down to what it looked to be an abandoned city. Soon the airship had collided with the ground THUD! Harry looked in the direction of the captain with an expression on his face that said what was that. Soon the crew had gone to find all the bits to repair the ship while Harry stayed on the airship walking slowly around. little did he know he was gonna be met by his sworn enemies!!!!
In your last sentence, you forgot to have a capital letter on the word ‘little’.
This is an amazing story, I especially love the name Captain Cecil where did you get the name? Maybe in parts you could add a little more punctuation in parts but overall this is one of the best stories I’ve ever heard I was drawn in well done!
AWSOME! This story rocks…if you would like you could use formal language instead of gonna… When’s the next part coming out, cant wait!!!😀