Part 3 of the sky ship adventure
As the children were frozen if fear they slowly snuck into the secret vent whole Rowan got Jarvis to haul the vent open and they all got in. Slowly they all crawled in tunnels and tunnels until they found the vent that leads to the outside of the balloon Harry made out a winged creature. Jarvis felt an urge to go and see it but all of them decided it would be to dangerous so they headed back and got supplies it had been more than the time the grown-ups had said they would be. Mostly the kids got smoke grenades and fire steels also food and water but they all had something different Jack had a base ball bat, Rowan had a knife, Harry had a riot shield, Jarvis had iron knuckles and lastly Ethan had fireworks. Rowan wasn’t the strongest but he made up for that in speed he had many talents he most of the time thought things through but sometimes he just went for it at this current point in time he felt proud of himself and his friends when he is doing what he is doing now he sneaks and crawls but normally he runs or walks like a normal person.
1. This is beautiful work, you should be proud
2. I think you can improve more adjective, describe the nouns.
3. I loved that you use amazing punctuation.
I really love how you put in the children slowly snuck into the vent.