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A mysterious escapade part 4

Cautiously, they shuffled through the forest and realised they were miles from the airship. They begin to lose their vision as they were plummeted into darkness. All night, peculiar harmonious sounds of the forest ring throughout. The unnerving squeals and howls, that sounds like something’s in pain. Without warning, Holly heard a startling noise and asked Andrew, “Did you hear that?” In an instant, Andrew heard gun shots in the distance echoing around the plantation. As he turned 180 degrees to face Holly, she was gone.

Alone, Andrew sulked over the uneven ground trying to make contact with Holly. Terrified, Andrew tried to fight the nauseous feeling in his stomach. Andrew pondered whilst searching for Holly. Will he find her? Is she still alive? Am I next? Andrew frantically shouts, “HOLLY, WHERE ARE YOU? ARE YOU OK?” It feels like hours of walking and searching, until twilight ended.

He stumbled upon a deserted village, where he found Holly and a young girl cooking on an open fire. Andrew sprinted over and threw his arms around Holly. “I’m so happy I’ve found you and your alive.” Holly replied, “I’m safe because this girl called Florence found me and brought me here.” Florence guides them out of the forest to locate their airship. They both asked Florence if she would like to join them on their airship for another adventure. Florence was speechless at the offer and was more than happy to join them.

 

One Response to “A mysterious escapade part 4”

  1. A brilliant example of building tension. I love that you describe the sounds so well. Just be careful with the tense – you switch from present to past and back again a few times.

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