Eva raced across the beach, her heart pounding. the wind danced through her hair as she dashed from hut to hut . waiting. watching. the waves crashed against the jagged rocks as her feet swooped through the golden- brown sand. As Eva settled down for the night, the back door creaked open…
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I loved your story! Although, you have missed a few capital letters.
That’s an amazing piece of writing but just remember to add a capital letter on the second sentence.
A like the wind danced through her heir it was nice and cool it made my day happy.
I like the fraise running across the beach, her heart pounding!!!
i love it but maybe you could of made it bigger and used more full stops.
I liked the fraise waiting, watching
I loved this!! I loved how you left it on a cliff hanger it really made me want to read some more! I also liked your short sentences. Just don’t forget your capital letters, other than that I loved it!!!!
Absolutely brilliant I like the adjectives.
It’s a great piece of writing but just remember to add you capital letters.