airship tradgey
Jacob and Matthew watched as a time bomb blew up there ship suddenly, they fell off but at the last second a devil and rock unicorn picked them up . but out of nowhere a bomb appeared and killed the devil unicorn it was dead. They got a soft landing but Jacob watched in horror because his left leg wasn’t there. They were in the mouth of a dinosaur. Matthew saw 3 things yucky flesh horrible spit and scary dead bodies. The two looked around behind them were sharp,ugly teeth and a tongue like a bunch of blood. suddenly they saw something.
Hi Matthew and Jacob! I really like this piece of writing. Do you like writing pieces of writing like this? When you wrote “Matthew and Jacob watched as the time bomb blew up there ship” You wrote the wrong there. Instead it needed to be their.
I love the last sentence! Just remember a capital letter for suddenly and a comma after suddenly! I love that you used dinosaurs! From Ava SWW!