In the room of football,
I heard a distant sound of crowds cheering.
In the room of silence,
not a sound could be heard.
In the room of music,
Symbols crashed in time with drums.
As I walked into the room of time travel,
I was whisked into the tudor era.
In the room of pesky pigeons,
They flew away like kites in the wind
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I like the music verse it’s really good how you say it crashes in time with the drums, on the last verse about the pesky pigeons you missed a full stop, good work though.
I really like how you did “In the room of football, I heard a distant sound of crowds cheering” It makes you feel like you can hear them.
For improvement you could try a bit more alliteration.