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Suspense

THEY Were FINALLY UP AND AWAY, UNTIL THEY HEARD A WEIRD noise  IN THE BACK it was some scratching claws what seemed to get closer and closer

IT WAS ANOTHER DANGEROUS DRAGON THIS TIME IT HAD GOT REALY ANGRY. It had fearless black teeth, a purple tongue it was chasing us for days it never gave up they didn’t know what to do it was clinging on the wooden back the darkening red, fire eyes flashed at the pace of a jet. The overriding thought was that we were not going to make it. The thought of us perishing like this was terrifying!

 

 

Suddenly, it was on the roof. We did not know what to expect. A long, powerful clawed hand, punch its way through the deck.

trying to get in it had stopped they peaked out to see if it was still there was a hole we was panicking to are death it had eaten everything it could, it got there smell and started to track them they went back in the air ship as the dragon was outside they was getting circled until they heard a bang … they was petrified and wanted to get out but decided to stay and save the ship.

THEY Were FINALLY UP AND AWAY, UNTIL THEY HEARD A WEIRD noise  IN THE BACK it was some scratching claws what seemed to get closer and closer

IT WAS ANOTHER DANGEROUS DRAGON THIS TIME IT HAD GOT REALY ANGRY. It had fearless black teeth, a purple tongue it

2 Responses to “Suspense”

  1. I like how you used suspense but i think you rushed the ending a little bit.

  2. Hi, I think you did really well showing that it was a dragon, and not always telling it. Maybe you could finish it after the dragon has struck the ship down and maybe the characters have to battle the dragon. I think this is a really good story. You did an amazing job.

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