Leaf licker
Giraffe, giraffe,
Why must you have such a long spine, like the tallest tree in the jungle dancing in the foggy blue storm, looking around for something to eat?
Giraffe, giraffe,
How did you get such a black tongue, black as the empty feeling you get when losing a battle, how can you withstand such darkness while being so bright?
Giraffe, giraffe,
How can it take so long for one majestic, magnificent, marvellous creature to eat one single leaf before realising there’s more to go?
Giraffe, giraffe
Why are there so many freckles on your body, looking like a dot to dot for 10 year old children, like little tiny pancakes sizzling in the sun on your body?
Giraffe, giraffe,
Who made it so that you must take so long to move like a snail you move little by little as if you only have one foot?
Giraffe, giraffe,
Where did you get such pointy ears like elves from the north pole but yet in one of the hottest place on earth?
Giraffe, giraffe,
Is it hard being the easiest animal to spot therefore making the lions, hyenas, and leopards belly’s full that night?
Giraffe, giraffe,
Where did you get such a calm sense like as if when you blink you meditate or imagine all of those leaves floating into your mouth
I like how this poem uses rich descriptions to create a vivid picture of the giraffe. The lines, “like the tallest tree in the jungle dancing in the foggy blue storm” and “little tiny pancakes sizzling in the sun on your body” paint a beautiful image of the giraffe.
One thing that could be improved is the consistency of rhyme and meter. In some stanzas, there’s a clear pattern, but in others, it’s more free form. Having a consistent pattern would give the poem more structure and make it easier to read.
A question for the author: Why did you choose to focus on the giraffe and what did you learn about the giraffe while writing this poem?
I really like this one i like how you have a kenning as your title
I love your word choice it makes it really amazing for the reader to read!