One Response to “The Sea by JackD”

  1. Lime class Aveley Primary October 1, 2020 at 10:26 am

    1.We like how you used alliteration especially in the line about the laptop.
    2.Could you expand,using further adjectives?
    3.Maybe, you could add even more exciting adjectives.

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