What I think of you.
You are a fog hanging in the air whilst trees tower over you.
You are as slow as a snail as quick as a lightning bolt and as quiet as a hedgehog hibernating.
You are a horrible box filled with disease, dreadful thoughts and despair.
You are Medusa’s snakes as green as an emerald gemstone.
You are a drip of sweat as salty as the sea.
You are Malaria, the disease of miserable mosquitoes.
You are a sly sheep dog herding the sheep in the early morning.
You are a surfer surfing through the bright blue sky the clouds are your surfboard.
You are a football being kicked around as you run through the muddy fields.
I like the idea of the sweat dripping. I think its really creative and is a great poem.
It was a really good powim
I like the powerful description you used
You could have done nothing better because it was amazing
1.I loved how you said as quite as a hedgehog hibernating.2. Why did you chose animals to describe ?3.Next time try and not use animals .
Wow brilliant I love the you are a football being kicked around as you run through the muddy fields!!
I like it but you could make it more realistic.
I liked when you said you are medusa’s snakes as green as an emerald gemstone
i love that .that was very intresting i love the posoniforcation.
I liked how you set it out.you could make it better by using a different slow animal .
1 wow I love that poem you are a fog haninging in the air whilst trees tower over you.
2 you should improve your words there was not much thought it was amazing.