The ocean The ocean waves sparkle like gems in the sun white foam like icing on an iced bun. The fishes leaped in the water like a dog on a trampoline.
Sharks sliced through the water like bread on butter. The corral were like an exhibition of jewels in a museum Whales swam as gracefully as a snow tiger.
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1)I really like that you described the ocean waves and how the sharks slice like bread on butter.
2) Could you name the jewel?
3) Think about naming the sharks.
Very good and very detailed.