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You are…

You are …

You’re you no matter what you believe in or what gender you want to be or skin tone you are you.

You’re a star, at day lost without being stolen, at night appearing without being fetched.

You’re lego, as hard as splitting a atom.

You’re Fun, scattering from place to place changing feeling’s.

You’re a hurricane causing chaos big as a moon, as tall as mount Everest, small as thief born in to being taut no love

9 Responses to “You are…”

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    teachinglive September 30, 2020 at 12:22 pm

    I love the first line of your poem, Max. I wonder if, on rereading it, your first line would be better as the last line? What do you think?

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    Charlie October 1, 2020 at 10:25 am

    I really like the Lego bit! A very unique idea in that line! Maybe you could of been more descriptive with the piece of Lego!

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    STC October 1, 2020 at 10:26 am

    I love the part where you used you’re a star,at day lost without being stolen.

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    IslaY5 October 1, 2020 at 10:29 am

    1. I like the fact that your poem is really deep.
    2. Have you star gazed before?
    3. I think you could maybe use some more describing words.

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    STC Liam October 1, 2020 at 10:32 am

    I think it is very good , I like the second line about the star. What made you think of the name? I think it would be a bit better if you put the second one as the last.

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    Izzy SH October 1, 2020 at 10:33 am

    I like the start. How did this come to mind? And maybe you could work on your making the sentence longer.

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    Kyra-Leigh Smith October 1, 2020 at 10:34 am

    I loved how you said you’re fun scattering from place to place changing feelings.
    Have you ever seen a hurricane?
    Maybe you could add more punctuation.

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